ext_23103 ([identity profile] plethorax.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] sam_storyteller 2005-08-19 07:33 am (UTC)

Jesus Christ, man, scary shit indeed went down. The pacing in the crypt scene was great.

I love how you handled Remus and Fenrir, at first I didn't believe that they could relate to each other, but then that scene made it so clear that of course they have a blood connection, and in Rowling's universe, what is stronger? I'm really keen on how the way Remus deals with Fenrir makes explicit the allegory between lycanthropy and childhood abuse and/or AIDS without being broad or political. It's good to see someone write characters who deal with man's simple inhumanity to man, in the middle of a Campbellian bildungsroman, even before we get to killing the dragon. It's so... grownup-novelist of you.

"...killed by architecture again." SO FUNNY.

One quibble; the "blurry figure in green in the distance, who appeared to be on fire" - I totally would not have got that without the clue in the abstract. I still went, "meh? Who's on fire? Oh yeah, there was that thing about Augustus Pye taking a smoke break, that must be who that is." *shrug*

Fine work! Looking forward with bated breath to the next chapter. I can't decide whether I'm more excited about 'what's in the box?' or 'when are Harry and Sirius going to get it on?'

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