Ouch. I like this :) Going to read the second part now.

I love the relationship you've crafted between Remus and Lily- and that you didnt use the cop out of the excuse that she is cheating because James is cheating (which alot of authors do, and annoys me)

This line made me LOL so hard:

and they ran back to the room just as James came barrelling out of it.

"Something went all insane!" he said, as Sirius scrubbed his hands.

James is such an idiot xD