I love what you did with the picture. It says so much about Neal, about where we are in the story... There's the saying "a picture says more than a thousand words", but the fact that you did that (better) with 'just' a description of a picture is... stunning.

Now, I don't want to heap on too much praise, but I know many authors have some difficulty with descriptions, and I think it's a mark of a really great author when they manage to describe an image in such a way that it becomes even more evocative than if someone would just insert an actual picture. Most of my best memories of literature have that in common.