You write the best threesomes. One of the things that I really loved was Peter's reaction to El's suggestion that they take Neal to bed. Often, when writing a fic (or RPing) there is a tendency to get a bit handwavey around real life issues and married couples.
Peter is one of the most faithful husbands ever. His devotion to Elizabeth is obvious. So, even though he might want Neal like crazy, he isn't just going to do something like that without a bit of protesting. In fact, he only surrenders when he realises that it would be something that El would enjoy.
Which feeds into the next thing. I love, love, love that El is the one who is ultimately in charge. Like Peter said earlier in this fic, he is in charge of Neal and El is in charge of him. I do have a bit of a personal preference for boy-boy-girl threesomes where the girl is clearly in charge.
I also adored the tie thing. It makes for a very subtle symbol, which makes it desperately hot as well. No one will know what it means but Peter, Neal, and El (I assume), but it's still a symbol and that's important. It's nice that Neal gets some claim on Peter as well. It isn't onesided and there's affection running both ways, which is nice.
That's the way I read it at least.
I read in other comments that you have a hard time writing sex-scenes for these three, and though it doesn't show at all, I think I can understand where you are coming from. It's not jarring exactly that they sleep together, because it works nicely in the story, but it feels a bit odd for them somehow. The best sort of D/s (for me) can sometimes be the one that isn't about sex at all. But, let's face it, sex is lovely and such a nice pay off.
I love that Neal came a bit too quick. Both because it makes sense considering his situation, but also because sex isn't always perfect in real life, and I find awkward/not perfect sex far more interesting (and hot) to read about. Also, I do hope that Peter makes him wait sometime, because that would be quite lovely. Not to mention the hottest thing ever. (I think El agrees with me on this one.)
Apparently, this is going to be the comment that never ends, because I just remembered that my absolute favorite moment of the fic is where Neal begins fretting over coming too quickly and Peter snaps him out of it by just saying his name. Lovely. I want that too. Where can I sign up for a Peter Burke of my own?
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You write the best threesomes. One of the things that I really loved was Peter's reaction to El's suggestion that they take Neal to bed. Often, when writing a fic (or RPing) there is a tendency to get a bit handwavey around real life issues and married couples.
Peter is one of the most faithful husbands ever. His devotion to Elizabeth is obvious. So, even though he might want Neal like crazy, he isn't just going to do something like that without a bit of protesting. In fact, he only surrenders when he realises that it would be something that El would enjoy.
Which feeds into the next thing. I love, love, love that El is the one who is ultimately in charge. Like Peter said earlier in this fic, he is in charge of Neal and El is in charge of him. I do have a bit of a personal preference for boy-boy-girl threesomes where the girl is clearly in charge.
I also adored the tie thing. It makes for a very subtle symbol, which makes it desperately hot as well. No one will know what it means but Peter, Neal, and El (I assume), but it's still a symbol and that's important. It's nice that Neal gets some claim on Peter as well. It isn't onesided and there's affection running both ways, which is nice.
That's the way I read it at least.
I read in other comments that you have a hard time writing sex-scenes for these three, and though it doesn't show at all, I think I can understand where you are coming from. It's not jarring exactly that they sleep together, because it works nicely in the story, but it feels a bit odd for them somehow. The best sort of D/s (for me) can sometimes be the one that isn't about sex at all. But, let's face it, sex is lovely and such a nice pay off.
I love that Neal came a bit too quick. Both because it makes sense considering his situation, but also because sex isn't always perfect in real life, and I find awkward/not perfect sex far more interesting (and hot) to read about. Also, I do hope that Peter makes him wait sometime, because that would be quite lovely. Not to mention the hottest thing ever. (I think El agrees with me on this one.)
Apparently, this is going to be the comment that never ends, because I just remembered that my absolute favorite moment of the fic is where Neal begins fretting over coming too quickly and Peter snaps him out of it by just saying his name. Lovely. I want that too. Where can I sign up for a Peter Burke of my own?