"I want human beings to make sense," the Doctor says forlornly.

*gigglesnort*

I like Rory best of the three, both in the show and in your story, and this makes me happy. It fleshes out who Rory is and I love that he never stops being a tad fumbly and unsure, even once Amy's his wife and the Doctor has all but coaxed them both back to the TARDIS.