imaginarycircus ([identity profile] imaginarycircus.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] sam_storyteller 2010-04-10 04:09 pm (UTC)

I love this. I can totally see the Raggedy Doctor and Jack groping the hell out of each other. It also explains why he took so long to get back and showed up 12 years late. HE WAS DAZED But unless this was the fastest groping ever--the apple would have turned brown. Unless that was a ruse on The Doctor's part to spare Amy's young sensibilities. Which makes his OMG JEFF GET A GIRLFRIEND hilarious.

Two small bits. "When you have dialog and," someone growls it. I cringe. I know that technically you can growl/talk, but I think its cleaner to either say:

"Blah de blah," Jack said. or "Blah de blah." Jack growled.

And coitus is PIV sex.

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